Rock & Republic Wikipedia Edit #2

For my second edit of Wikipedia’s “Rock & Republic” article, I contributed a brief description of the brand’s collection. I mentioned items the company plans on releasing and discussed how Rock & Republic’s popularity is primarily attributed to its line of denim. I also included a quote from the company’s website, which describes the reasoning behind the brand’s name. Somewhat self explanatory, the name explains how the design of the clothing is meant to reflect rock and roll and is meant for people who live the lifestyle.

Conestoga Wikipedia Edit #3

In my third edit of Wikipedia's "Conestoga High School" article, I made grammatical changes throughout the text. There were many run-on sentences that I corrected by inserting commas. The other major grammar problem was sentence structure. I rephrased several of the sentences to make them flow better and replaced repeating words.

Article #2 from Required Blogs

According to the article "Gaming is for Grown-Ups" on ClickZ Stats, one third of adults spend more than 10 hours per week playing games compared to only 11% of teens. The article speculates the reason for the gap is because teens have less free time. I also feel adults spend so much time playing games because it is something to do when they are bored at work, and they usually have access to PCs right at their desks.

While adults prefer to game on PCs, teens log in more playing time on consoles. I was very surprised to read that teen girls make up a large portion of multiplayer gamers. Even though I was a teen only 4 years ago, I knew very few girls who played online or video games. However, more girls game now in general. Also, games geared towards girls encourage multiplayer involvement. For example, a popular game among girls is Dance Dance Revolution where players can compete in “dance-offs.”

I was drawn to this article because I have always been very curious about “gamers.” I thought they were a small group of teens, mostly male, who were completely obsessed with gaming, fantasy, sci-fi, and so on. However, my opinion has completely changed, and I, too, may be a gamer someday since the most female gamers are in the 25-34 year old age group.

Rock & Republic Wikipedia Edit #1

Currently, the information Wikipedia contains on Rock & Republic is considered a "stub." My goal is to develop the stub into a full article. Originally, the stub contained three sentences stating the brand's founder, owner, and celebrity co-designer. After my first edit, the stub is now two paragraphs. I described the founder's background in fashion design, named celebrities who wear the brand, and listed the stores that carry it. I also listed two references in the reference section I created.

Conestoga High School Wikipedia Edit #2

When visiting Conestoga's homepage, I noticed an announcement that the school was selected to receive the 2006-07 Siemens Foundation Award for Advanced Placement. I added this accomplishment under the Advanced Placement section in Wikipedia's "Conestoga High School" article. I also noticed on the school's website that two of the staff heads changed for the 2006-07 school year, so I updated this information on Wikipedia, as well.

Nordstrom Wikipedia Edit #2

My second edit of Wikipedia’s “Nordstrom” article corrected many grammatical errors in three of the article’s sections. One of the corrections I made was adding necessary commas after introductory clauses. There were also several compound sentences that either lacked commas or had unnecessary ones, which I corrected. There was one sentence that was originally repetitive because the word “about” was used twice, so I replaced one with the word “regarding.” In addition, there was a run-on sentence, which I separated into two sentences. I must admit I am quite embarrassed because I spelled “repetitive” wrong in the comment section beside my one of my edits.

Lilly Pulitzer Wikipedia Edit #2

For my second edit of Wikipedia’s ”Lilly Pulitzer” article, I corrected numerous grammar errors. There were two introductions to sentences that began with “In (a certain year)” that lacked a comma after the phrase, so I made those additions. There were also multiple comma and quotation errors. Originally, the period or comma was outside of the quotation marks surrounding a phrase, so I made corrections by placing either the comma or period inside the quotation marks. The article also contained a few wordy sentences, so I deleted unnecessary words. Unfortunately, I forgot to check the box at the end of the edit page stating that this was only a minor edit.